tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post8225168035278938265..comments2023-10-25T05:30:54.507-04:00Comments on Oh Get A Grip!: Recursive FrustrationAshe Barkerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03390519279886657608noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-32233312037696952832015-01-01T23:50:57.963-05:002015-01-01T23:50:57.963-05:00Ooh, thank you for sharing the secret! Those edits...Ooh, thank you for sharing the secret! Those edits sound good to me. I like the in-story justification for keeping "lovely", definitely. :)Annabeth Leonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07455191827664110878noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-1086653132183770562015-01-01T09:32:47.834-05:002015-01-01T09:32:47.834-05:00Thanks, Annabeth. This was something of an exercis...Thanks, Annabeth. This was something of an exercise in self-control.<br /><br />As for what I'd cut, I'd change "stuffed his mouth, choking his moans" to "choked his moans" (-3 words). And I would drop "dining room". (-2 more)<br /><br />I would keep the "lovely" though. <br /><br />Dom's are not ALWAYS right. ;^)<br />Lisabet Saraihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05162514190572269660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-46444445756188035332015-01-01T00:59:20.496-05:002015-01-01T00:59:20.496-05:00I love the flasher within a flasher format, Lisabe...I love the flasher within a flasher format, Lisabet! It's amazing to get a frame story going with just 200 words. Awesome! <br /><br />I'm also curious which 5 words you'd cut, though I know what you mean about that spoiling it. :)Annabeth Leonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07455191827664110878noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-45926774155631354152014-12-29T20:34:40.026-05:002014-12-29T20:34:40.026-05:00Intense! This somewhat reminds me of a hilarious p...Intense! This somewhat reminds me of a hilarious poem by Simon Sheppard, "Poetic Discipline," in which the gay-male narrator is being topped by a scary male Muse.Jean Robertahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08805088081675965859noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-66660560046357855322014-12-24T22:55:33.826-05:002014-12-24T22:55:33.826-05:00{Grin}
Thanks, Sacchi!{Grin}<br /><br />Thanks, Sacchi!Lisabet Saraihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05162514190572269660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-41123108270699451472014-12-23T14:23:40.589-05:002014-12-23T14:23:40.589-05:00Great story! Kind of puts the "hard" in ...Great story! Kind of puts the "hard" in hard work cutting words from one's writing. Sacchi Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10801164916418570059noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-85357745060067247992014-12-23T05:55:29.801-05:002014-12-23T05:55:29.801-05:00Thanks, JP!
I used to hate writing flashers, but ...Thanks, JP!<br /><br />I used to hate writing flashers, but something has changed. I think I've gotten more disciplined LOL.Lisabet Saraihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05162514190572269660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-57810481186725469592014-12-23T05:53:49.203-05:002014-12-23T05:53:49.203-05:00This was a really interesting exercise, because I ...This was a really interesting exercise, because I knew from the start I wanted a flasher inside a flasher.<br /><br />And in fact, I know exactly what I'd cut to get the inner flasher down to 100 words.<br /><br />But that would spoil the whole thing!Lisabet Saraihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05162514190572269660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-36693348268768019112014-12-23T05:52:49.084-05:002014-12-23T05:52:49.084-05:00Thanks, Naomi!
I have a secret belief that 200 wo...Thanks, Naomi!<br /><br />I have a secret belief that 200 word flashers are for wimp!Lisabet Saraihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05162514190572269660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-22215044876093718412014-12-23T05:52:05.632-05:002014-12-23T05:52:05.632-05:00You should see me try to hammer a nail without ben...You should see me try to hammer a nail without bending it or smashing my thumb!<br /><br />Although thanks to my husband I do know how to mix concrete.Lisabet Saraihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05162514190572269660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-61927423552833005242014-12-23T01:35:01.250-05:002014-12-23T01:35:01.250-05:00The bare bones - and it worked so well!The bare bones - and it worked so well!JPhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10305127219838784688noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-73256821613261203612014-12-22T11:37:57.134-05:002014-12-22T11:37:57.134-05:00That's what we tell 'em for Flasher Sunday...That's what we tell 'em for Flasher Sundays on ERWA:<br /><br /> "Cut, cut, cut!"<br /><br />One of the most telling (and fun) elements of the flasher experience is when we condense a 500 or 1000 word story into 200 words. We then see how bloated our prose can be, and just how much it actually takes to tell a complete story. The rest is embellishment. The opposite path is to tell the story in just a few words, then add the embellishment (sex). Yeow!Daddy Xhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12927663248424944119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-88520779294784173792014-12-22T10:31:49.923-05:002014-12-22T10:31:49.923-05:00What lovely punishment. I love this!What lovely punishment. I love this!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08698820496991305443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-12253858581389147112014-12-22T09:19:27.484-05:002014-12-22T09:19:27.484-05:00Lisabet:
Is there anything you don't do well? ...Lisabet:<br />Is there anything you don't do well? You've set the bar high with this one and that's despite me being squiky about the cuckold male thing. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15484640447109164744noreply@blogger.com