tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post3532717936047809197..comments2023-10-25T05:30:54.507-04:00Comments on Oh Get A Grip!: Here's Depending on YouAshe Barkerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03390519279886657608noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-47384588998616556952014-11-11T10:18:23.186-05:002014-11-11T10:18:23.186-05:00This was a fun read, although the thing about thai...This was a fun read, although the thing about thailand confused me a bit. Is he escaping to Thailand? is he on the run? Anyway, the property thing is fun, it reminds me of something Chuck Palahniuk would have written. It has that sound. Have you read any of his stuff?<br /> <br />Garce Garceushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11160407485298015371noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-60631292798538849282014-11-07T21:06:40.649-05:002014-11-07T21:06:40.649-05:00Hmmm... I understand the first person elements of ...Hmmm... I understand the first person elements of this, but my thinking was that the very nature of a letter puts the reader into the position of being spoken 'to'. Wouldn't that make a lot of this second person future tense? You'll do this... see that...watch out for... Will you please...<br /><br />Again, this is just how I thought about it. I appreciate the input.Daddy Xhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12927663248424944119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-23259777772474534412014-11-07T16:18:01.840-05:002014-11-07T16:18:01.840-05:00I think the fact the the narrator talks about &quo...I think the fact the the narrator talks about "I" quite a bit, as in "I'll be in Thailand," keeps it from being second person. Second person requires a narrative where "you" are performing all the action and thought processes. "Choose your own adventure" stories come closest, with things like, "You come to a river and see a bridge, but there are big gaps in it. If you take a chance on crossing the bridge, go to page such and such." But even then some entity is presenting the alternatives. Still, your story would work if it went along the lines of, "You can't believe you're getting this crazy letter from somebody you can scarcely remember. (Letter inserted here." What the heck are you supposed to do? You crumple the damned thing, but cant bring yourself to toss it in the fire." etc. etc. <br /><br />Just my very semi-informed take on it.Sacchi Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10801164916418570059noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-90774037764019654312014-11-07T12:28:03.738-05:002014-11-07T12:28:03.738-05:00Huh! I thought the narrator is speaking directly t...Huh! I thought the narrator is speaking directly to the reader. Lots of 'you's'. I'm not arguing with you guys; you have much more knowledge than I on this stuff. Perhaps I have the wrong idea about what constitutes second person. How embarrassing.<br /><br />And as I said re: Spencer's comment- If I got this letter, my reaction would be "I can't believe this!" That was the connection with 'disbelief'.Daddy Xhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12927663248424944119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-77708542298801833612014-11-07T00:12:01.618-05:002014-11-07T00:12:01.618-05:00Hey, Daddy,
I agree with Sacchi - I wouldn't ...Hey, Daddy,<br /><br />I agree with Sacchi - I wouldn't call this second person. But who cares? It's a vivid piece, all the more delightful because you've created a fully fleshed character without telling the reader anything about him, directly.<br /><br />As for disbelief - sorry, but the details in this vignette had me believing!Lisabet Saraihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05162514190572269660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-68993465964623167672014-11-05T21:02:11.404-05:002014-11-05T21:02:11.404-05:00I'd question the narrator/letter writer's ...I'd question the narrator/letter writer's belief that his friend will do everything in his instructions. A belief apparently based on a chance encounter at a bar when they hadn't seen each other for a while. So the belief part works for me that way. I'm not so sure about it being second person, though--the narrator/writer is writing in first person. Maybe if it started out something like, "You get this letter out of the blue, and you don't low what to think." Followed by what "you" do think, and do or don't do. But second person is in the eye of the beholder, so there may not be any real definition. Sacchi Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10801164916418570059noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-55970050651187469072014-11-05T15:38:29.687-05:002014-11-05T15:38:29.687-05:00I agree with Spencer. This guy's a fascinating...I agree with Spencer. This guy's a fascinating character, but I can believe him. He's weird, but lots of people are. :)<br /><br />I think it's fun that you took on a 2nd person challenge! Annabeth Leonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07455191827664110878noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-17444965901048560712014-11-05T10:32:42.097-05:002014-11-05T10:32:42.097-05:00If you received this letter, how many times would ...If you received this letter, how many times would you say: "I can't believe this!" :>)Daddy Xhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12927663248424944119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-44005385810694655342014-11-05T08:44:17.206-05:002014-11-05T08:44:17.206-05:00Daddy:
I'm not sure where disbelief or suspens...Daddy:<br />I'm not sure where disbelief or suspension there of enters this story. The way you set it up it's all too easy to imagine receiving this from a neighbor/friend who has inhaled a lot of smoke from forbidden weed or just spent too much time away from civilization.<br />"Don't bogart that joint my friend...." Far out" and other 60's salutations. Is that Canned Heat I hear playing in the background?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15484640447109164744noreply@blogger.com