tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post5622527155538957899..comments2023-10-25T05:30:54.507-04:00Comments on Oh Get A Grip!: The New PandoraAshe Barkerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03390519279886657608noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-22223070773344550542018-07-13T12:41:41.933-04:002018-07-13T12:41:41.933-04:00Jean, I think you should let your imagination run ...Jean, I think you should let your imagination run free (not to mention your impressive historical knowledge). Don't try to shoehorn it into the constraints of a short story. You've got so many wonderful ideas swimming around in this excerpt, but my feeling is that you're diving in too quickly. This cries out to be extended at least into a novella. Lisabet Saraihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05162514190572269660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-90085153795856096132018-07-13T09:26:03.807-04:002018-07-13T09:26:03.807-04:00Thank you, Annabeth.Thank you, Annabeth.Jean Robertahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08805088081675965859noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-39570688490432286772018-07-10T17:46:27.414-04:002018-07-10T17:46:27.414-04:00I agree that it sounds like there’s just too much ...I agree that it sounds like there’s just too much going on for a short story. I am always sad when I have a story that feels like it has something to it but I can’t find it a home or figure out the problem. This seems clever and worth the attempt. So add me for one more vote!Annabeth Leonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07455191827664110878noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-17955544574761186132018-07-09T12:49:18.871-04:002018-07-09T12:49:18.871-04:00Another vote of confidence! This is encouraging.Another vote of confidence! This is encouraging.Jean Robertahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08805088081675965859noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-32145939063846791162018-07-08T23:00:01.473-04:002018-07-08T23:00:01.473-04:00It does sound intriguing, and worth a longer form ...It does sound intriguing, and worth a longer form to handle all the information as well as the action.Sacchi Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10801164916418570059noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-66512901321323891572018-07-07T01:56:23.028-04:002018-07-07T01:56:23.028-04:00Thank you for the encouragement, Fiona! I should p...Thank you for the encouragement, Fiona! I should probably work on it this summer, while I have the time. Making it grow to at least novella-length looks easier than cutting out parts I want to save. :)Jean Robertahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08805088081675965859noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9156334464585894857.post-61363492369875364222018-07-06T13:43:53.949-04:002018-07-06T13:43:53.949-04:00Very interesting beginning to your story! It's...Very interesting beginning to your story! It's the kind of thing that I love to read, but my muse doesn't give me to write myself. I think you should keep trying to bring it to life! Pun intended.Fiona McGierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13495707848048468428noreply@blogger.com